Two-way Mirror and other frustrations! (OotP Spoilers!)

[kenyonkrish2]

No: HPFGUIDX 62909

--- In HPforGrownups at yahoogroups.com, "falcongk81" <falcongk81 at y...> 
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> In respect for those who haven't finished OotP, spoiler break...
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> Ok, was anyone else extremely frustrated that Harry didn't remember 
> the package that Sirius had given him so that they could 
> communicate?  <SNIP> Sirius had openly told him "Here is a way for 
> us to communicate."  ARGH!  I was so frustrated.
> FalconGK


This seemed to me to be one of the largest plot holes / most 
distressing lapses in JKR's concentration (#2: in Snape's Pensieve, 
Snape's memory containing events of which he had no knowledge, 
essentially a POV shift.) 

This lapse could have easily been rectified with a few additional 
lines (and what's a few more?) stating that Harry tried using the 
mirror but Sirius didn't answer. (I'm away from my cell phone and 
miss calls quite often, and my phone is a whole lot smaller and rings 
louder than that mirror.) Perhaps Sirius even could have found 
Harry's message when he next saw the mirror, like voice mail, and 
thus knew that HP had gone to the MoM to "rescue" him, thus Sirius 
called in the OotP cavalry, rather than Snape sitting on the 
information that Sirius was fine and not bothering to tell HP that. 
That almost smacks of Snape *wanting* HP to go to the MoM, or by 
negligence, putting him in danger. 

And what was with Snape discontinuing those Occlumency lessons, 
anyway? DD should be pissed. 

It seems to me that JKR needs a good beta reader. Many of our 
quibblings on these boards (and Flint-like oopsies) could probably be 
cleared up if she had a few, perhaps several, folks who read her mss. 
before she FedEx'd it to her editor, perhaps someone who could 
control her abuse of ellipses (. . .) and em-dashes (--). I figure, 
really, I could have cut around 100 pages from OotP, which translates 
into something like 30,000 trees for the American printing alone, by 
correcting the punctuation and paragraphing, without removing a word. 

TK -- recently delurked.