Two scenes for most everyone (was Re: Retribution for Snape the Teacher)

lagattalucianese katmac at katmac.cncdsl.com
Mon Dec 5 18:37:16 UTC 2005


No: HPFGUIDX 144118

> 
> Yes, yes, they must meet under the supervision of a
> trained social worker, otherwise it will be a bad
> fiction. :-)
> 
> Irene
> 
Oh, by all means. It ain't resolution if it ain't got third-party 
arbitration. ;D

O.K., I don't see why they have to do it in one knock-down-and-drag-  
out session, just sit right down and eat it right here with no air 
and no coffee, just somebody from Child Protection Services to make 
sure nobody says anything actionable. :P

Seriously, how about something like this for at least getting the 
dialog between Snape and Harry rolling:

  Harry set the tray of dressings down on the bedside table.
  "Mr. Potter?"
  Harry looked down at Snape in surprise. He hadn't expected him to
  be awake. Not for a long time.
  "Yes, Professor?"
  Snape slid a hand out of the blankets. "Thank you. For saving my 
  life back there."
  Harry took the thin, icy fingers. Only, he discovered, the fingers 
  were warm.
  "Erm, you're welcome, sir. Only it wasn't me. It was Neville."
  "Neville Longbottom?"
  "Yeah. The Death Eaters must have thought you were dead, cause they 
  went off and left you, and Neville just walked back in there and 
  got you and carried you out in his arms. Hermione just about had 
  kittens."
  At the mention of Hermione, Snape smiled softly. It improved his 
  looks no end.
  "Guess I'm finding out who my friends are." 
  "Guess you are, sir." Harry squeezed Snape's fingers gently.
  "Harry?"
  "Please tell Neville thank you."
  "Yes, sir." Harry grinned. "Can I kiss Hermione for you too?"
  Harry looked to see how Snape would react to that. But in that 
  brief interval, Snape had drifted back into sleep. Harry tucked 
  his hand back inside the blankets and tiptoed out of the infirmary.

To me, that's the sort of stiff-necked, stuffy apology that Snape 
would make. With just a suggestion of thawing that Harry can take and 
run with.

--La Gatta








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