Two scenes for most everyone (was Re: Retribution for Snape the Teacher)
lagattalucianese
katmac at katmac.cncdsl.com
Mon Dec 5 18:37:16 UTC 2005
No: HPFGUIDX 144118
>
> Yes, yes, they must meet under the supervision of a
> trained social worker, otherwise it will be a bad
> fiction. :-)
>
> Irene
>
Oh, by all means. It ain't resolution if it ain't got third-party
arbitration. ;D
O.K., I don't see why they have to do it in one knock-down-and-drag-
out session, just sit right down and eat it right here with no air
and no coffee, just somebody from Child Protection Services to make
sure nobody says anything actionable. :P
Seriously, how about something like this for at least getting the
dialog between Snape and Harry rolling:
Harry set the tray of dressings down on the bedside table.
"Mr. Potter?"
Harry looked down at Snape in surprise. He hadn't expected him to
be awake. Not for a long time.
"Yes, Professor?"
Snape slid a hand out of the blankets. "Thank you. For saving my
life back there."
Harry took the thin, icy fingers. Only, he discovered, the fingers
were warm.
"Erm, you're welcome, sir. Only it wasn't me. It was Neville."
"Neville Longbottom?"
"Yeah. The Death Eaters must have thought you were dead, cause they
went off and left you, and Neville just walked back in there and
got you and carried you out in his arms. Hermione just about had
kittens."
At the mention of Hermione, Snape smiled softly. It improved his
looks no end.
"Guess I'm finding out who my friends are."
"Guess you are, sir." Harry squeezed Snape's fingers gently.
"Harry?"
"Please tell Neville thank you."
"Yes, sir." Harry grinned. "Can I kiss Hermione for you too?"
Harry looked to see how Snape would react to that. But in that
brief interval, Snape had drifted back into sleep. Harry tucked
his hand back inside the blankets and tiptoed out of the infirmary.
To me, that's the sort of stiff-necked, stuffy apology that Snape
would make. With just a suggestion of thawing that Harry can take and
run with.
--La Gatta
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