Umbridge, detention, scars, and plotlines, oh my!. - Clumsy?

[eggplant9998]

No: HPFGUIDX 126110


"lupinlore" <bob.oliver at c...> wrote:

> I wonder how much of the problems 
> with OOTP could have been avoided 
> if the editors had had the freedom
> to treat her manuscript with the 
> same rigor they would have shown 
> an unknown author's. 

I don't see the problems with OOTP that you do, nor do most people I
think it's safe to say considering it's popularity. However you do
have a point, it must be a bit intimidating to be JKR's editor, you'd
need the confidence of a heart surgeon and the courage of a test pilot
to walk up to the most successful novelist of all time and say "No no,
you're doing it all wrong, do it this way
"

If I were her editor I would timidly suggest only two changes to OOTP: 

1)  In the final exam Harry is looking at Venus and Orion, but Venus
can only be seen near sunrise or sunset and this was about midnight,
and Orion is a winter constellation and it was June. Change it to
Saturn and Polaris.

2) Cut out unnecessary adverbs, the book would be 10 pages shorter. 

Eggplant