[HPforGrownups] Veterans Suffering, was Re: CHAPDISC: 34, The Forest Again.

[terrianking at aol.com]

No: HPFGUIDX 185083

Pippin:
<SNIP>
The last glimpse of  Albus as he leaves is a thin face, ablaze 
with excitement. Now who does that sound like? He's going to 
have a struggle, like his middle namesake, because  Hogwarts 
is no wonderland.
<SNIP>
"Harry kept smiling and  waving, even though it was like a 
little bereavement, watching his son glide  away from him...." 

The first time I read that, I thought "bereavement"  was a 
little over the top for someone watching his middle child 
go off to school
<SNIP>
The original last line,  besides telling rather than showing, 
would have driven the literalist  nit-pickers up a tree.

Why, they would want to know, is Harry's scar now  only visible 
to those who love him, when everybody could see it before?

As written, it's better, IMO.

Robert: 
Interesting comments I can agree with. What did you think of the 
description of Draco Malfoy? A man with all the spirit gone out 
of him, a receding hairline  - a man looking old before his time, 
I thought when I read it. The thing I liked  about him was he was 
such a good bad guy, a good nemesis, but to see him so  dispirited 
and unable to respond to Harry as a his old self. . . very sad.