Helping JKR edit

[Amy Z]

Cindy wrote:

> Oh, I can already tell OoP will be *way* too long. 
> Allow me to 
> demonstrate:
> 
> "The hottest day of the summer [so far] was drawing
> to a close 
> and a drowsy silence lay over the large, square
> houses of Privet 
> Drive  The only person left outside was a teenage
> boy who was 
> lying flat on his back in a flowerbed outside number
> four."

I can go you several words better.  Deletions in
[brackets], additions in *asterisks.*

"The hottest day of the summer [so far] was [drawing
to a close] *ending* and a drowsy silence lay over the
[large, square] houses of Privet Drive  The only
person [left] outside was a teenage*r* [boy who was 
lying flat] on his back in a flowerbed outside number
four."

Or we could keep the whole dern thing to one page,
even including the chapter illustration by Mary
Grandpre.

R/H version:

"Harry got sick of the Dursleys and went to school. 
Potions sucked, Herbology was amusing.  Ron kissed
Hermione and she slapped him.  Hagrid died, and then
Voldemort tried to kill Harry.  It didn't work. 
Hermione asked Harry to spend the summer at her
house."  <commence waiting for Book 6>

H/H version:

"Harry got sick of the Dursleys and went to school. 
Potions sucked, Herbology was amusing.  Ron kissed
Hermione and she smiled through the rest of the year. 
Hagrid died, and then Voldemort tried to kill Harry. 
It didn't work."  <commence waiting for Book 6>

Amy

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