A Little Less Harry...

[taykimson]

No: HPFGUIDX 172464

Overall, I enjoyed the book.  However, I think it would have helped 
the storytelling tremendously if there were A and B storylines.  If 
it didn't happen to Harry or if it was not told to Harry (in some 
way - he heard it, he read it, he saw it in the Pensive, etc.), we 
didn't find out about it.

I think this (A& B stories) would have allowed for a briefer version 
of the `tent wandering' and the lull in the story that came with it

(or maybe it wouldn't have and this is wishful thinking on my part)

Things that I would have liked to have seen as potential `B' story 
lines:
•	Ron's adventures when he left Harry and Hermione
•	Events at Hogwarts told as they happened, not told after the 
fact from Neville (to Harry, I might add).
•	Actions of the Order of the Phoenix – besides the radio 
program, what else were they doing?
•	Voldemort's activities – outside of what Harry saw through 
visions.   Just because that was the only way Harry could find out 
what Voldemort was up to, doesn't mean it was the only way we could 
find out what Voldemort was up to
a little dramatic irony please?

I believe the only time we saw a `B' storyline was the 1st chapter.  

Sonya