Changes I would make

[Geoff Bannister]

No: HPFGUIDX 177385

--- In HPforGrownups at yahoogroups.com, "eggplant107" <eggplant107 at ...> wrote:

> In the Epilog the first thing I'd do is erase the last 3 words, "all
> is well" it is a little too much like "and they lived happily ever
> after". And then just to drive fans crazy as they speculate on just
> what was gong on I'd say that as Harry walked along Platform 9 3/4 he
> did so with a slight limp, and then when he waves his  departing son
> goodbye he does so "with his good hand". Imagine the intense
> speculation those few words would generate! Harry has a loving wife
> and three great kids that adore him, and that is just about the
> definition of a good life; but the above would hint that the past 19
> years have not been entirely uneventful. 

Geoff:
Yes, I could buy into that version of the epilogue.... it would have had 
the fanfic writing brigade scrabbling for their biros. My only quibble 
would be that I have never been a fan of Ginny and was rather 
disappointed when Harry married her and obviously at a relatively early 
age.

Eggplant:  
> And by the way, in book 6 when Slughorn says the fumes from the Love
> Potion rise in a characteristic spiral pattern I'd change it to "a
> characteristic helical pattern.

> And in Goblet of Fire, I wouldn't have dust rising out of Voldemort's
> father's gave; I'd have a large slightly smelly skull.  

Geoff:
These last two left me somewhat puzzled. You have in the past expressed 
a wish for more dramatic events such as mayhem etc. including the wish 
that Harry should have killed Draco and suddenly you dive into minutiae 
such as mathematical curves and bones!

Some mathematicians consider a spiral to be a specialised helix and why 
a smelly skull? What's the big picture? Do tell!